Revisions - Assignment #4

While comparing my rough draft with the final paper I have turned it, I see plenty of changes. First of all, my rough draft was short and messy, while the final paper was neat and organized in the means of sentence and paragraph structure. Also, I have replaced some of the words that were repeating or were not on the college writing level, which significantly improved the look and style of my final paper. I did plenty of revisions to the content and organization. I managed to shift and move some paragraphs to more acceptable place. I also decided to get rid of some that did not fit in overall composition. I improved the focus of the story by narrowing the topic, and leaving only the most credential and important thoughts selection. After revising my paper it was clear to me that I have a major issue with sentence structure and run on sentences. The peer review did a great job guiding me in the process of revising my paper. Jeremy M, my peer reviewer gave me clues to improve my essay and told me some of his ideas of how to make it flow nicer. He also instructed me not to focus on the story line, but on the literacy narrative portion of the essay. As a matter of fact, the peer review was extremely helpful in my writing process. I think the strongest aspect of my essay is the vocabulary and the humorous mood shifts. The weakest part of my essay is the sentence structure and grammar, which I have always have trouble with.